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Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Sunday 19th March 2006 7:13am

These are really great! I hope you'll be updating soon! Or are these just teaser chapters? I've especially enjoyed the Phoenix Reborn ones...

Ken Warner posted a comment on Sunday 19th March 2006 2:13am

You have done a lovely job of a child POV - the way she describes seeing magic so naturally, without any self consciousness, is wonderful.
This very definitely a story I hope your muse picks back up on. Thanks for sharing this start.
Warmest Regards

Ken Warner posted a comment on Sunday 19th March 2006 2:06am

Very nice, very plausible -
All in all a very sweet beginning to what could be an interesting llok at domesticity among survivors.
Thanks

Pleather Boots posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 8:44pm

Very good! LOL I the kid is cute.

Pleather Boots posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 8:40pm

Hmm, you're right, too good to throw away.

Lostchyld posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 3:43pm

May I insist that this story be written?? 'Tis very interesting-ish.

Cheers.

-The Lost

AzureSky posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 3:38pm

Nice story. Full of fluff :)

Jason Karr posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 12:41pm

look forward to Dora's reaction to this news

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 12:32pm

Very nice and a very different PoV. Oh to be a fly on the wall when Clarissa tells Dora what she knows about Dora's condition - esp. since Dora "knows" that it's nearly impossible. *chuckle* Then again, Harry isn't your normal wizard in any other sense, so why should this surprise anyone?

Aberforth's Avatar posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 12:20pm

I liked this piece very much. I thought you did a wonderful job with Clarissa'a POV. The ratio of assertion to assumption to fact rang very true-to-life, reminding me of overheard snippets from my daughters conversations when they were small.

Also well done was the way you sketched out just enough of the circumstances of the story to allow us to imagine the details of the larger whole.

David Thacker posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 10:35am

Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can.

Antosha posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 10:09am

Mmmmmm...

I realize that this was intended to be part of something larger, but it stands alone as a lovely oneshot that manages to be both sad and hopeful. Nice work!

Olafr posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 9:45am

Interesting story. It's often difficult to conceive of how another person sees the world, particularly someone who's special in some way - smart, or has some unusual sense, or something. I like that kind of story because it serves as a useful reminder that everyone sees themselves as normal. I like your use of first person in this story - it's a very natural fit.

Most excellently done, good sir. (The handling reminded me of Emergence, by R. Palmer, a wonderful book that regrettably is over a decade out of print. That, by the way, is a compliment, not an accusation! ...and it's a great pity that Palmer only ever published two books.)

- Olafr.

The Resident posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 9:32am

Thank you for sharing these snippets of inspiration. I found them quite interesting. I often have a piece of a story pop in my mind and then I squish it like a bug because I know I'll never be able to do any real exposition of it. I edit. All I've ever written that was any good were a short story and a poem. The story under a different pseudonym and the poem under my real name.

Prince Charon posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 7:47am

OK, that was a cute and beautiful PoV piece.

David posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 7:27am

A kid's sense of time is based on what they do/remember, anyway, instead of how many times a machine goes ping. Well done writing a child's perspective, and if I were a Ministry Justice of the Peace (or equivalent), I too would be somewhat scared of being the guy who pronounces Harry Potter to be married to ANYONE.

burnunit4 posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 6:45am

Having Tonks not remember what she orignally looks like is orignal. It's usally that she falls back to her orignal form at sleep time. I love seeing orignal ideas. kudos to you.

Kokopelli replied:

Actually, that's taken from the old legend of Proteus, who could assume any shape, but always became an old hunchbacked man as he slept.

FenrisWolf posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 6:42am

Nice ficlet, certainly an interesting start for a Harry/Tonks story.

My one critique is with the idea that metamorph abilities preclude childbearing. If that were the case, the power would be selected out of the gene pool rather quickly. Aside from that, though, I liked it, as well as I can like any story that's not H/Hr.

Kokopelli replied:

Yeah, well, you try keeping a child in utero when you're changing shape and body chemistry.  Per canon, Metamorphs are very very rare, so I'm thinking that they're a sport of some sort.

goddessa39 posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 6:27am

Like it alot. Do they know about her'seeing colors' yet though? CONTINUE.

Crys posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 6:12am

Hmm. Really, REALLY good story. Liked the kid's POV. You pulled it off beautifully.