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Lee Dickie posted a comment on Sunday 30th July 2017 12:44pm

A well written 'nice' story that was an enjoyable read. I'm just sorry to see it finish as it was a pleasant change to all the action and intrigue that gets circulated.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks - if you thought it was nice and enjoyable to read, then I succeeded.

Nemoblank posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 11:25pm

Wait a minute, twin sons? Isn't Neville a brown haired fatass and Harry a black haired starvling? Lets not go too far in this. It would be more intesting to see a composite family trying to get along,

Kokopelli replied:

Go back and read the paragraph again.  She's raising two boys, whose birthdays are a day apart. She's essentially raising them as brothers, which makes them fraternal twins.  This Harry didn't spend 10 years being starved at the Dursleys, he instead spent less than a year with relatives that didn't like him much, so he's not the runt that canon Harry is.

mwinter posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 5:09pm

Cool story. Dumbledore must be ticked that in stead of a short 7 years to kill Voldemort it'll take longer and less people die this way.

Kokopelli replied:

Dumbledore gets out-maneuvered and loses a lot of control, which is probably good for all involved.

Dad posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 3:38pm

Very original. Very enjoyable.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for your kind words.

strandale posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 3:23am

what an amazing journey, thanks for the ride kokopelli. (shipper in me is absolutely DEVASTATED that julia didn't win the remus sweepstakes, though.)

Kokopelli replied:

Oh, puh-leeze, I've had enough static from shippers over the years.  Julia admires Remus, and at one time might have had a teeny-tiny crush on him, but she realizes that Remus is on a different trajectory.

WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 6:39pm

Interesting wrap up of the story...a good end without being all JKRappy. The omake is humourous and you know who wears that pants in that family.

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uthamm posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 5:08pm

Compentent Neville before 7th year, interested engaged parents for Harry and a dramatically reduced Dumbledore?

Very nice - this would be a Harry who is a lot more like James . . . learning for fun and interest rather than life and death. I also liked the play to Remus' belief that nobody would want him by having Alice ask!

Thanks for sharing.

Kokopelli replied:

In an earlier chapter I had Julia reacting to Remus's "who would want me" statement, yes, Alice _had_ to initiate things.

As to James and Neville, they're polite and kind, two traits that would never be used to describe Sirius or James, who were really spoiled jerks.

vl100butch posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 1:39pm

Thank you for writing this wonderful story. I haven't spent a lot of time here lately and drifted into this by accident, but for the last few weeks seeing an announcement that the next chapter is posted was good news.

I hope you'd consider writing something else in this particular universe.

Kokopelli replied:

This story is now done.  I could see some fun in writing Daisy in a subsequent HP tale, but that would most likely be a one-off.

pilotg21969 posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 12:06pm

I enjoyed this story thoroughly. I am particularly fond of stories that deviate from 'canon': that ask, and try to answer the "what if?" questions. Those that are well-written, as this one is, are a feast for the mind. Thank you.

Kokopelli replied:

That's the whole point of fan-fiction.  Now, there are some what-if's that aren't all that interesting to me - what if Hermione were a boy and Harry and Ron were girls has potential, but it's not something I want to write.  

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 11:16am

A solid sensable ending and we discover that Remus gets wordy when flustered. Thanks for wrting this.

Kokopelli replied:

There are so many ways that scene could have gone - Remus was interested, but not willing to hash everything out at the moment.  Canon Remus has very low self esteem - no one could love him because he's a monster - which is why Tonks pushing the issue is so sweet at the end of Half-Blood Prince.  His willingness to abandon Tonks in the next book made me want to hurl.

Quizer posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 8:50am

There's a repeated mistake in all the recent chapters where the name of Thorfinn Rowle is constantly spelled as one word, with the space between his first and last name removed (ThorfinnRowle). You might want to go through the entire story to search-and-replace that.

This story has been very enjoyable. Great to see you're still writing after so many years. Keep up the good work!

Kokopelli replied:

The ThorfinnRowle problem seems to be somewhere in the website - when I post the HTML file the word is correct, but it shows up wonky once the file goes live.  Thanks for your kind words.

sh777 posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 7:17am

Really enjoyed this story, thanks.

Kokopelli replied:

You're welcome.

Noble Korhedron posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 3:50am

Damnit; I'd have liked more, but you seem to have only been using this to get over writers block…

Kokopelli replied:

75k words, putting out a chapter a week I would argue is a little more than a palate cleansing exercise.  I write for fun, not for profit, I have a job, and I have a life - so I'm not going to bang out 200k words in two months.  There is another chapter after this one.

Wolfric posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 2:49am

Congratulations for finishing another fine story. I am always glad to hear from you so whenever time and inclination permit I would love to read some more. Thanks for writing. W.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for reading.

Wanderer posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 2:23am

I really liked how consistent Remus was, and the concept of embracing their wolf to learn voluntary turning really resonated with me. I may very well have to Yoink that (with credit, of course).

My only confusion is with Daisy, whose character seemed to be rather unpredictable in her mannerisms before somehow settling down rather drastically in what seemed like a very short time. Perhaps I just misunderstood the timeline.

Overall this was quite a lot of fun, with a very nice finish to leave a content smile at the finish (?).

Thanks for sharing your time and talent, it's really nice to read something new from you!

Kokopelli replied:

Daisy is my Liza Doolittle character - when she first appears she's a smart but uneducated (illiterate) teen who was raised by wolves.  She has a good ear, so she learns how to talk to fit in, but she still uses words by ear - so it's fairy moans rather than pheremones, semester rather than trimester.  There's all sorts of gaps here, because I'm trying to write a short piece, not a 300k word monster.

Fic Chick posted a comment on Thursday 27th July 2017 10:54pm

I Iiked this fic.

Kokopelli replied:

Me too.

apassov posted a comment on Thursday 27th July 2017 10:05pm

This was absolutely wonderful. Thanks!

Jason9 posted a comment on Thursday 27th July 2017 10:02pm

As always, I greatly enjoyed this story. On paper the outline probably wouldn't sound half as good as the story actually is, but your characters, and the depth of motivations, settings, and your writing style in general make it an absolute pleasure. Thank you for taking the time to write and publish it - I only wish it were longer!

Kokopelli replied:

If I were getting paid for this, it would be longer, and more detailed.  This is a hobby that fits into the crevices in my life when I have time.  Thanks for reading.

reseh posted a comment on Thursday 27th July 2017 9:07pm

I really enjoyed this story. I liked the strong Remus. I liked the wolves, especially Maud and Daisy. This was a lot of fun to read, even though I had to re-read last chapter to get it straight (tricksy writer!). I think this was a good ending spot, but on the other hand I would enjoy more. Thanks a lot for posting!

amulder posted a comment on Thursday 27th July 2017 8:51pm

A nice ending... I think I am most interested in how Daisy transforms from a heavily accented speaker to the gracefully lady of the last few paragraphs. And my mat says she would only be 30 at that point.

I really like your Alice a lot. Very strong.

But that sorting is where you lost me. I am a strong believer in choice when it comes to sorting and you have Harry sorted over his objections!?!?

Hmm, no Snape? I may need to search back through the chapters to see if I missed something there.

Kokopelli replied:

Daisy is my Liza Doolittle - she's an illiterate hillbilly when she first appears, but she wants to fit in, so she does so by ear (and learns to read).  She's still using words by ear - fairy moans for pheremones, semester for trimester.

I like Alice too, but I've always like to write strong female characters.

As to the sorting, Harry wasn't as desparate in this storting it was more  "Hufflepuff, but I wanted to stay with Neville!"  The Hat was sorting for the benefit of Hogwarts, which needed the BWL to reinforce Hufflepuff, the neglected house.