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fyrecat posted a comment on Wednesday 18th October 2017 11:21pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Quite a fun story. Thank you!

ILikeToRead posted a comment on Friday 6th October 2017 9:42pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Fun ending to this story. Thanks for sharing!

bowers.larry@gmail.com posted a comment on Sunday 3rd September 2017 9:36am for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Excellent!!! I enjoyed your story and your original characters. Your thoery on werewolf transformation was great. I also enjoyed much of the background such as places and islands and such. I looked up many things and locations. I find that a plus.

Thank you for sharing your time, talents and imagination with us readers.

Kokopelli replied:

Such a thoughtful review - thanks.  Certain things I find hard - like character names.  I try to make the geography and the backgrounds work.  I'd have a hard time creating a 100% new universe, because I'd have to make maps and create histories - too much like work if you ask me.  I'm glad you enjoyed the story - it was fun to write.  Certain things (like Daisy) just tended to take off in a direction all their own.

crystalscan2056 posted a comment on Sunday 13th August 2017 2:39pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Heck of a good story! Thank you for writing it. I know this site isnt as well trafficked as it once was, and I missed it. Keep it up!

millercommamatt posted a comment on Wednesday 2nd August 2017 2:41pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

It's been a while since I last journeyed into the storied landscape of Kokopelli's mind. I'm glad I did. There's less and less HP fan fiction to read these days and good writing has almost dried up. Thanks for the oasis.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for the kind words.  There's a few bright spots, and then there's the frustratingly incomplete stories.  One reason I try to write shorter pieces these days is so that I can reasonably be sure to finish it before life interferes.

robbspotter posted a comment on Tuesday 1st August 2017 3:26pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

ooohhhh like the probable end, brilliant thanks, up for more if you get inspired thanks

Kokopelli replied:

It's awfully tempting to write some one-shots with Daisy.

 

Ken Warner posted a comment on Monday 31st July 2017 5:53am for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Thank you for sharing a delightful story, much improved by the logical thinking of the Marauders instead of the evil of Dumbledore.

Your version of Alice is delightful in her practicality and kindness, the subtle way that you sketched out and colored in the her character is a skillful bit of writing.

Daisy is a pure wonder, Galatea at her very best.

Warmest regards

Kokopelli replied:

One of the big challenges for any fan fic writer in the HP lane is how to portray Dumbledore.  Is he incompetent?  Is he manipulative and evil? JKR definately writes like he's a good guy, but there's a lot of death and destruction in his wake.  Alice is, of course, a blank slate, but I tried to do justice to her character, with Mom winning out in the end.  Daisy?  I had no idea that Daisy would grow as a character when I first wrote her into a scene, but she's a good fit with the story arc, so away she went.

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Sunday 30th July 2017 12:44pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

A well written 'nice' story that was an enjoyable read. I'm just sorry to see it finish as it was a pleasant change to all the action and intrigue that gets circulated.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks - if you thought it was nice and enjoyable to read, then I succeeded.

Nemoblank posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 11:25pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Wait a minute, twin sons? Isn't Neville a brown haired fatass and Harry a black haired starvling? Lets not go too far in this. It would be more intesting to see a composite family trying to get along,

Kokopelli replied:

Go back and read the paragraph again.  She's raising two boys, whose birthdays are a day apart. She's essentially raising them as brothers, which makes them fraternal twins.  This Harry didn't spend 10 years being starved at the Dursleys, he instead spent less than a year with relatives that didn't like him much, so he's not the runt that canon Harry is.

mwinter posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 5:09pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Cool story. Dumbledore must be ticked that in stead of a short 7 years to kill Voldemort it'll take longer and less people die this way.

Kokopelli replied:

Dumbledore gets out-maneuvered and loses a lot of control, which is probably good for all involved.

Dad posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 3:38pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Very original. Very enjoyable.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for your kind words.

strandale posted a comment on Saturday 29th July 2017 3:23am for Chapter the Eighth and Last

what an amazing journey, thanks for the ride kokopelli. (shipper in me is absolutely DEVASTATED that julia didn't win the remus sweepstakes, though.)

Kokopelli replied:

Oh, puh-leeze, I've had enough static from shippers over the years.  Julia admires Remus, and at one time might have had a teeny-tiny crush on him, but she realizes that Remus is on a different trajectory.

WhiteElfElder posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 6:39pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Interesting wrap up of the story...a good end without being all JKRappy. The omake is humourous and you know who wears that pants in that family.

Kokopelli replied:

uthamm posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 5:08pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Compentent Neville before 7th year, interested engaged parents for Harry and a dramatically reduced Dumbledore?

Very nice - this would be a Harry who is a lot more like James . . . learning for fun and interest rather than life and death. I also liked the play to Remus' belief that nobody would want him by having Alice ask!

Thanks for sharing.

Kokopelli replied:

In an earlier chapter I had Julia reacting to Remus's "who would want me" statement, yes, Alice _had_ to initiate things.

As to James and Neville, they're polite and kind, two traits that would never be used to describe Sirius or James, who were really spoiled jerks.

vl100butch posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 1:39pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Thank you for writing this wonderful story. I haven't spent a lot of time here lately and drifted into this by accident, but for the last few weeks seeing an announcement that the next chapter is posted was good news.

I hope you'd consider writing something else in this particular universe.

Kokopelli replied:

This story is now done.  I could see some fun in writing Daisy in a subsequent HP tale, but that would most likely be a one-off.

pilotg21969 posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 12:06pm for Chapter the Eighth and Last

I enjoyed this story thoroughly. I am particularly fond of stories that deviate from 'canon': that ask, and try to answer the "what if?" questions. Those that are well-written, as this one is, are a feast for the mind. Thank you.

Kokopelli replied:

That's the whole point of fan-fiction.  Now, there are some what-if's that aren't all that interesting to me - what if Hermione were a boy and Harry and Ron were girls has potential, but it's not something I want to write.  

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 11:16am for Chapter the Eighth and Last

A solid sensable ending and we discover that Remus gets wordy when flustered. Thanks for wrting this.

Kokopelli replied:

There are so many ways that scene could have gone - Remus was interested, but not willing to hash everything out at the moment.  Canon Remus has very low self esteem - no one could love him because he's a monster - which is why Tonks pushing the issue is so sweet at the end of Half-Blood Prince.  His willingness to abandon Tonks in the next book made me want to hurl.

Quizer posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 8:50am for Chapter the Eighth and Last

There's a repeated mistake in all the recent chapters where the name of Thorfinn Rowle is constantly spelled as one word, with the space between his first and last name removed (ThorfinnRowle). You might want to go through the entire story to search-and-replace that.

This story has been very enjoyable. Great to see you're still writing after so many years. Keep up the good work!

Kokopelli replied:

The ThorfinnRowle problem seems to be somewhere in the website - when I post the HTML file the word is correct, but it shows up wonky once the file goes live.  Thanks for your kind words.

sh777 posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 7:17am for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Really enjoyed this story, thanks.

Kokopelli replied:

You're welcome.

Wolfric posted a comment on Friday 28th July 2017 2:49am for Chapter the Eighth and Last

Congratulations for finishing another fine story. I am always glad to hear from you so whenever time and inclination permit I would love to read some more. Thanks for writing. W.

Kokopelli replied:

Thanks for reading.